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Wishing Stories!

 

In our model text the structure of the wishes is very clear:

  1. little wish to test if wishing actually works…
  2. Asking for a BIG WISH to help with the job you've been asked to do
  3. Quickly wishing to correct whatever ridiculous thing happened with the BIG WISH, so that it’s all back to normal!

 

THURSDAY

Yesterday you had a big job to do. You had to use your planning notes to start writing a first draft of your wishing story. 

 

Hopefully yesterday you wrote paragraph number 3, which involves the small, tester wish. Then paragraph number 4 which involves the BIG WISH  that then goes horribly wrong!

 

Step 1: Complete the first draft

Today you need to complete paragraph number 5 where your main character uses their final wish to fix everything. Finally, paragraph number 6 is when the parent arrives to check in on the main character.

 

Remember to use your plans and your work from previous lessons to help you.

 

PLEASE DO NOT WORRY ABOUT STEP 2 IF YOU HAVE SPENT

A LONG TIME COMPLETING YOUR FIRST DRAFT.

 

Step 2: Edit and improve your story

 

When you’re finished, we’ll need to edit our work to make sure it is of a really high quality before we write it out neatly, as our published piece!

 

When we edit and improve, we’re keeping an eye out for three things:

1. CORRECTING

This means correcting any missing punctuation, missing words and misspellings.

 

2. CHANGING

This means changing any words or sentences that are not clear, don’t make sense or are a bit repetitive.

 

3. ADDING

This means adding extra words and/or sentences to improve your writing. This could be a single extra adjective or adverb that adds much needed detail. 

     

I would like you to check your first draft from yesterday and make it even better.

 

Like we do in school, you could use a purple pen (or any colour pen or pencil!) to show where you have made corrections, changes and added detail.

 

The Steps to Success below might be useful to push your work up to the next level.

 

I look forward to seeing your work!

 

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